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Congratulations Competitors!- Critique and List

Journal Entry: Sun Jan 6, 2013, 8:59 PM
:star: Congratulations Competitors :star:

Below is a series of lists for each guild of who made it through to the next round-- BUT FIRST

We would like to give some general critique on the entries.



As we judged, we noticed several common problems that were consistent with most of the entries.

We're listing it below so you can keep in mind what we all look for in future rounds.  If you want to score high marks, take a look at this list and keep it in mind.


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:bulletred:Story:

- Write your story as if the audience knows nothing about Duality. Would the average person understand and enjoy this comic if the happened across it?

- With regards to battles, make them interesting! Steam rolling your opponent is no fun and won't win you any points. Think about action scenes in movies or TV and how they're portrayed. How quickly would you lose interest if the main character breezed through every obstacle?

- Show some resolution! Don't leave your Rounds open ended with the intent to wrap it up depending on the mod's decision because it makes your comic look unfinished which will lose you points. Those lost points could cost you. Assume you'll win and write your story that way.

- Dialogue. As a general rule of thumb, dialogue should be used to:
1. Advance the story
2. Provide information (about characters, setting, etc)
If your dialogue isn't doing something along those lines, then there's a fair chance you can edit it out without your story suffering.


:bulletorange:Character:

- The mods did not read any apps before looking at comics, which means all we learned about your character is what you chose to tell us in your comics. If we walked away without even learning your character's NAME, then there was a problem. This was your chance to introduce us to your characters and let us grow attatched to them. We can't do that if we know nothing about them!

- Give us some motivation! Why did you character want to join the Guild? Are they interested in the upcoming war or do they simply not care? Do they have any opinions on it? Always ask yourself WHY your character is doing something and then SHOW it in your comic.


:bulletyellow: Objective:

- The first solution is usually the most obvious, which is why we suggest to avoid it. Chances are, a lot of other contestants came to that solution as well which will make it harder for your comic to stand out. Be creative. Be unique. Examine it from all angles.

- If you're not sure about something, ask! The mods are here for your convenience. If you're not sure if your plan falls under the rules, then ask us and we will be happy to discuss it with you! You won't lose points if we know what the plan is in advance. You will lose points if you fail to follow the rules because you never checked.


:bulletgreen: Effort:
- Avoid spelling errors. Have someone else proofread your work before submitting it to the group. Constant and consistent typos are an easy way to make your comic look unprofessional and it distracts from your story. If you don't know someone, then ask the group! We're a pretty friendly community and we're sure you'll find someone willing to read over your comic.

- Don't neglect the setting. We know that a lot of people struggle with backgrounds, but it doesn't have to be a masterpiece. You are awarded points for making an EFFORT.

:bulletblue: Art:

- SHOW, don't tell. If your character is angry, don't have them say "I am angry", SHOW us that they're angry. If your character is a master hunter, then SHOW them hunting masterfully. If your character is looking for shelter, SHOW that, don't just tell us.

Pettyartist has put together a little walkthrough explaining this out a bit: headmagemilena.tumblr.com/post…


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Now that you've all read that , here are the advancing competitors from each guild (in no particular order)!

::Edit:: I added in people's usernames so there's less confussion


:bulletpurple: THIEVES :bulletpurple:

1. Hornet Nyapapa
2.  Ren lixelated
3. Inuko mr-tiaa
4. Vic The-Hybrid-Mobian
5. Drysi Krazy-Kaitie
6. Farah Samantai
7. Aurora WingedNovelist
8. Blair ChocolateMilkLOL
9. Juliet ClashoftheBunnies
10. Hildegarde OtmaBouth
11. Laila AbovethePlanets
12. Pants Zerochan923600
13. Terrowin WackyTwillight
14. Muriel Bandannamania
15. Ashley Karret
16. Adolpha lugiamaster
17. Maeve GoneViral
18. Drelia bruceliane
19. Rat Genaleah
20. Luhre spartan990
21. Cypress Kotsuso
22. Schwer scrap-paper22
23. Robyn Raedio
24. Melody Awesome-Vince
25. Ratt Zexion-the-gamer
26. Mirela jackhatts
27. Raevyn SteelFeathers
28. Lee ShinjiRyuu
29. Rachel weasel-warrior
30. Gael J-Cartoons
31. Sae oofuchibioo
32. Logan PrincePizzaParty


:bulletblue: MAGES :bulletblue:

1. Dinah Umbrielle
2. Sapphire finra
3. Coza biscuitcrumbs
4. Ishmael MaxVesta
5. Surya Protocol00
6. Yao Strat Moonania
7. Isolde Bealicey
8. Esmer arkeis-pokemon
9. Elwyn Norbiester
10. Ismay saltpixie
11. Roger DiseasedBear
12. Zavia Owlbearz
13. Cholet b0409d
14. Robin CinnamoonAkia
15. Eglantine Patrona
16. Dacivilier Vuro
17. Nika aikiro
18. Elias azkainer
19. Pietro Crows-cry
20. Freya nicaranime
21. Ican Magnios
22. Peter 555Nexos555
23. Ludvik TeamPastaSalad
24. Atticus  Meta-Akira
25. Ender TheTimePolice
26. Skylar Reb320
27. Klein HopelessAce
28. Tamir dragonrider22
29. Leo Sparrow-Kaizu
30. Celil Master-Liafi
31. Mytho Mad-Plot-Bunny
32. Lynette inu-nutfan


:bulletorange: WARRIORS :bulletorange:

1. Caith April-Lily
2. Micare Jejunity
3. Lorette BlueEevee
4. Annabelle apple2017
5. Sean cocowoushi
6. Elise mahoumii
7. Aubrianne Bat-Lass
8. Rey Nicku
9. Kingsley applePAI
10. Abner sounri
11. Eric WforWumbo
12. Aesha justamuse
13. Feliks drawingFrog
14. Rhett CoryKatze
15. Micha Fire4dragon2
16. Sybbyl Juleshao
17. Rowin FatJose
18. Jenga Kaku-Mei
19. Gaen Cashe132
20. Triston ChaChaFox
21. Yue Russponse
22. Lester Semi-Charmed137
23. Axis Jexima
24. Roy Ritzuma
25. Amira feelingwhimsy
26. Syd FeralFighter
27. Eian blueflyfish
28. Damien Skele64
29. Tristan Shimetsuki-Hikaru
30. Marlow madgenius2013
31. Clifton BKrook
32. Merek MSchonberg


:bulletgreen: RANGERS :bulletgreen:

1. Lynn coldfire0007
2. Pidra sofiaaq
3. Reeve PunkOz
4. Lark Blizzardpaw
5. Eris realist-n
6. Kobe KikiGourgandine
7. Fir Filecreation
8. Aston piyostoria
9. Ingrid kuromizuouji
10. Wilt sevenluck
11. Yegor  Micka33
12. Satu andalsopineapples
13. Warin tttwigs
14. Mab Crimson-Cara
15. Robin Emberwyng
16. Caith oOSpellsingerOo
17. Edeka Puffy333
18. Arya JinxBiss
19. Neona StarLynxWish
20. Thomas MikeMoroney
21. Zahira Kebbige
22. Maya Alseida
23. Riley Tyncelu
24. Kaye TheRockingHorseFly
25. Georgaina TobiANN
26. Allen  ColdSniper7
27. Gideon CaptainDoghaus
28. Sel chihachi
29. Lady tara  Reganismyfirstname
30. Wibke temmybanana
31. Daya Skarmorei
32. Atryl Redwind36
Congrats again everyone!

:star: If you want critique on how you did specifically for this round, please note the group!  We're happy to tell you how you did in each category, what we liked about your and how you can improve!-- bear in mind there were over 200 entries and there are only 4 of us!  If we don't get to you right away, don't fret!  We WILL give you critique as soon as we can get to your ask! :star:

Note: If you did NOT advance but you would still like to contribute or have your character enact the plot out with the main characters, PLEASE transfer your character's app to an NPC form and resubmit it to the NPC folder!  
Obviously you will not be competing, but that doesn't mean you can't join in on the story from the NPC side of things!  We would love it if you stayed with us and cheered on the competitors as they advance and help make this OCT a outstanding and supportive community!


And remember:

Round one's prompt will be announced on JANUARY 9TH!

Hope you all are excited!

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:iconbrandmuffin:
Brandmuffin Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Is it to late to ask why I didn't get through to round 1?
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:iconshoelesscosmonaut:
ShoelessCosmonaut Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Nope! Just shoot us a note.
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:iconbrandmuffin:
Brandmuffin Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Okay, thanks!
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:iconmanatiki:
manatiki Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Congratulations for the competitors :rose:
I'm really glad to see Hornet, Ashley, Inuko and other awesome characters on the list.

I didn't pass, but I wasn't really expecting to pass anyway.
and actually I don't know how I'd manage to work on the next rounds since I barely made my preliminary in time.

I'll turn my character into an NPC and still make part of the Duality fun. thanks for the opportunity.

can I receive my score ? and if possible the critique as well... I want to improve for my further octs...
How do I proceed ? Should I send a note ?
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:iconshoelesscosmonaut:
ShoelessCosmonaut Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
Just shoot us a note and we'll get back to you with your score.
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:iconpug-in-the-mug:
Pug-In-The-Mug Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Didnt make it. But I knew I wouldnt, it was pretty obvious XD
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:iconthepuertoricandragon:
ThePuertoRicanDragon Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Houshounah... I missed...
...no bother. Due to potential external issues, I am not planning on making her an NPC just yet.
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:iconblacksteelseishirou:
BlackSteelSeishirou Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Can you get a critique if you didn't get in?
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:iconshoelesscosmonaut:
ShoelessCosmonaut Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Yep
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:iconblacksteelseishirou:
BlackSteelSeishirou Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
okay. Thank you. ^^
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:iconemberwyng:
Emberwyng Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
I MADE IT! *giggles like a little girl*
I was really worried. I'll just work really hard on the first round, so I won't have anything to worry about!
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:iconmr-tiaa:
mr-tiaa Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Digital Artist
dude i rly cant put in words how happy im soadoaksoahdoaksoa"

i wasn't trusting myself on this contest but whoa i'm in ;__;"
thank you so much !!

i will do my best to don't dispoint u guys /cry
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:iconmanatiki:
manatiki Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
purr :heart:
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:iconmr-tiaa:
mr-tiaa Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Digital Artist
:heart: ; __ ;
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:iconbrandmuffin:
Brandmuffin Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
*goes to sit in a corner*
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:iconweasel-warrior:
weasel-warrior Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i...i'm in :D




hell yes! >:3
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:iconworkerbees:
WorkerBees Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Question: will there be other opportunities to enter, or is this it?
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:icondragonrider22:
dragonrider22 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
*velociraptor screech*
IM IN!!! :DDDD

aaaaand here went my night sleep :D
too exited for it now <:3
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:iconnia-katomi:
Nia-Katomi Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Artist
congrats you guys~ ill look forward to seeing all the hell youre gonna have to go through~ c:
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:iconchurromagic:
churromagic Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
///cries
well it is my own fault??
oh well, I'll update it when I have time...
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:iconvgxviiidenovo:
VGXVIIIDenovo Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Clint didn't make it... oh well. No hard feelings, at least now I can devote myself to other areas that need special attention! Thank you for considering me! I had fun while it lasted! ^^'
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:iconjackhatts:
jackhatts Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
i hope that rat and ratt become close friends. congrats to everyone!
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:iconcoldsniper7:
ColdSniper7 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey, I did it! XD
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:icontherockinghorsefly:
TheRockingHorseFly Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH MY GOODNESS THANK YOU DUALITY
:D I'm so happy! I can fly! I had a dream about flying! Why did I say that! YEAHHH
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:iconofficer-1bdi:
Officer-1BDI Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations to everyone who made it! Seeing the results makes me regret not finishing my own entry. :(
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:iconlugiamaster:
lugiamaster Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist
....holy cow. I'm honestly surprised. And excited!!! I'll do my best to improve as the OCT moves along!!!
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:iconjinxbiss:
JinxBiss Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
THANK YOU VERY MUCH, JUDGEEEEEES!!!!!!!
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:icon555nexos555:
555Nexos555 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
:iconexcitedplz: I CANT BELEIVE I MADE IT!!!! :D :D :D

*ahem8 Sorry, lost my composure there.... but YAY! :D
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:icon555nexos555:
555Nexos555 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
Oh, and sorry for those who didn't make it. :( Congrats and good luck to the one's who did though! :D
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:iconjinxbiss:
JinxBiss Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'M IN!!!!!! So happy!!!

BUT, there's something I'm not too happy about.
Most of the things you described as to be expected from the intro comics were things you mentioned AFTER the countdown ended.
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:iconzannyhyper:
ZannyHyper Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I’m afraid to say we posted the criteria originally on exactly Friday 26th October 2012 within the FAQ.

Here's the link to the journal [link] and if you search for “How will the entries be judged?” you will see the follow which I have copied and pasted below

"How will the entries be judged?

All four mods will be present during judging and we'll be sitting down and discussing each entry in length. As for what we're looking for:

Story: Is there a plot? Is it presented well? Does the story feel rushed or cliche? Does it get the reader hooked?

Character: Are the characters in character? Are they engaging? Do they have depth or are they following a character arc?

Objective: Did the artist complete the objective? Did they do so in a creative fashion?

Effort: Is it a bare minimum effort? Does the quality remain consistent throughout the entry/competition?

Art: Is the art used to enhance the story? "

As we read the entries we became aware that, people must have forgotten the criteria. So we just re-posted it, but slightly more in depth.
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:iconjinxbiss:
JinxBiss Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm sorry. I was unfair in my judgement. I think I may have forgotten , since it didn't draw much of my attention. Again, sorry. Yet, thanks :)
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:iconmagnios:
Magnios Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'M IN!!! Good luck to everyone in the tournament, and sorry for the ones who didnt make it!
... I nearly died of a heart attack while reading that list...
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:iconrealist-n:
realist-n Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:faintsfromhappiniess:

The rounds are all judged separately, right? So doing bad on this one won't have repercussions later? o.o
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:iconshoelesscosmonaut:
ShoelessCosmonaut Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
The rounds are judged separately, BUT we do look for improvement in entries. If an artist continues to repeat the same problems, then they probably won't be getting far.
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:iconraedio:
Raedio Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Filmographer
*happy dance*

Congrats to everyone!!!
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:iconleafthegreat:
LeafTheGreat Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Well, I didn't get in :(
Congratz to everyone that got in, and GL!
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:iconsparrow-kaizu:
Sparrow-Kaizu Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I made it
oh my god
*dies*
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:iconandalsopineapples:
andalsopineapples Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my god I made it. *flops on the ground*
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:iconmoonania:
Moonania Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
I like it that out of everyone on the list, Im the only one with the full name xD
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:iconmschonberg:
MSchonberg Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Had a heart attack reading through the list before finding out I was #32; now all I need to hope for is no more natural disasters so I can prepare for Round 1!
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:iconnoodlex1337:
Noodlex1337 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw... Hey, at least I gave it a shot. I was just too busy to make it better, which is a prime example on how not to distribute time for working on stuff.
Anyways, congratulations and good luck to all the participants who passed!
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:icondarkness423:
darkness423 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
Aw crap...oh well gl to everybody else!
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:iconkuromizuouji:
kuromizuouji Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I... I made it... Is this life? Or is this just fantasy?
Caught in a landslide, no escape from reality.
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:iconapplepai:
applePAI Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Filmographer
... MOTHER OF PEARL I actually made it--
Wow, there's a great thing to wake up to on one's birthday xDD

Congrats to all the competitors who made it through! 8'DD
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:iconcocowoushi:
cocowoushi Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!
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:iconapplepai:
applePAI Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Filmographer
Thank you! ;v;
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:iconblueeevee:
BlueEevee Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
OmigodIactuallygotinI'mfreakingout:DDDDDDDDD

Congrats to everyone who got in!
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:iconcaptaindoghaus:
CaptainDoghaus Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I MADE IT!!! I would love to see my comic breakdown!
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:iconcaptaindoghaus:
CaptainDoghaus Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh, is this the order of of I placed in the rangers? Im still nervous if i’m #27
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